I love the animation of this! That part is definitely shining. So is the color palette and the humor, it's great.
A few things I'd like to see improvement on: Editing. Some shots just hold too long. The shot of the "Nite" reading the tablet? Too long. We can do with at least one less pass of his eyes going over the text, maybe even two. We understand everything we need to about that shot very quickly. It also holds too long at the end. Same with the shot of the nite looking back at the skeleton toward the end. This holds far too long, and the shot that slowly zooms out is also just way too long. Make things a bit snappier. I don't necessarily need, or even want, traditional Hollywood cut-cut-cut style editing, but I think there's no reason to hold any shot longer than the average audience member needs to gather all of the necessary information.
Second, I like what you're doing with sound, but I want you to push it even just a bit further! First off, all of it sounded just a bit low quality. Are you doing all of your sound in Flash itself? If so, I would recommend doing your sound design and mixing outside of it, maybe in Premiere if you've got it. And also, I just want the sound design to be pushed a bit further. More sounds that tell the story, and give us an idea of what is going on in the character's mind. More sounds that tie into the editing, more sounds that give the world a little more flesh!
Lastly, I want to address your shots. I like what you're doing generally with the shot choices, BUT, I think they could get even stronger with more practice! I want to see a wider variety of close ups and wide shots. AND, I want more shots that contain important information in the frame! I like the backgrounds you've got, they're great. But I think that sometimes, they could contain more information to help the story along, or just to flesh out the world. Sometimes it feels like there is just a bit too much dead space in the frame that isn't doing all that much to add to the film. I think more variation in lighting could help too. That cave/tunnel was honestly too bright! It could be darker and moodier. More harsh shadows. More contrast!
I'm only saying these things because I think you're very good, by the way. Don't take these negatively! I just think that giving some thought about things you could add or vary more could help these animations take even another step down the road of polish and perfection.
Feel free to disregard everything, of course, if you want, and keep making what you enjoy making! That's what matters after all.
Thank you very much for such a detailed review. ^^ I too have felt that some parts are dragged out but that was after I published the video. :/ I did all of my sound editing in Flash but the reason it's low quality is because I didn't crank up the publish settings to the max. :S I couldn't wrap my head around it until later on. You have a point on so many things so I'll definitely take your review into account. ^^
Oh my god! I've been looking for this piece forever, and I gave up on finding it, and now I all of a sudden find it on the front page of Newgrounds!
I saw this piece at the Oakland Underground Film Festival 2014 (where it was playing alongside one of my live action films), and loved it. It was amazing, and I can't believe the amount of effort that must have gone into this. Full 5 stars, guys. I'm glad you're putting this up for the rest of the world to see.
I definitely like some of the ideas in here, and I think the choice to make it word-less is a good one. BUT, speaking from a filmmaker's standpoint, you need to cut the film shorter. The cuts need to be more activated. There are times when we cut into a scene and have to wait a few beats for a character to show up on screen. We should cut from a scene before the character is completely off it, to a new scene where the character is already entering. I think it would help the flow of this piece. Also, the sound editing needed just a bit of finessing, and it made some of the cuts too apparent (often, we want to hide the cuts. Though this is a stylistic choice, I think this film would benefit from it).
Oh, and one more thing, this piece isn't really for Newgrounds. Newgrounds specifically asks that the videos you upload have some use of flash or animation in them, and this is pretty much straight film. Anyway, I hope this didn't sound too harsh! I hope you keep making films, because it seems like you've got some cool concepts.
I understand the cuts thank you for the constructive crit. But i'm still not seeing anywhere on the site that says you can only upload an animation. The site actually says before you click on it "NewGrounds, ANYTHING by ANYONE" :)
This is very good for a first flash game. I didn't get too far, but even the first levels were somewhat challenging. The music was kinda slow and not...bunnyish, but that isn't much of a problem. Nice level design!
Very helpful, but...
I've managed to get the button to lead to a different frame, but how do I make it go to a different scene? I think you should add that into the tutorial.
Very well done. Amazing job.
This is a great game. I don't even know if I could think of this many things to add. I have a few things to say about it. First of all, I had the Infinite Attack Bug nearly the entire game....it kept coming back...but it never caused any problems for me. I just kept playing, and when I evacuated bases, I didn't even lose the one I was leaving. The game was a bit easy though, I don't think that I really had trouble at any point...and it was a bit short, but great ending! I loved the actions you choose from at the end. I'd have been unhappy if I left my cheesy snacks behind as well....Anyway, awesome game! Keep making Flashes! I would love to see some more Blockhead!
So would I (Blockhead), he won't be in time for Halloween but it WILL be Ghostmas-themed this year. Expect him soon :)
I love trance, and I love this
I love techno/trance/dance songs in general, and this one is no different. Even though it's your first attempt at it, I think it sounds like a professional trance song. I have already downloaded it and put it on my MP3 player! Make more =)
I'm glad you enjoyed this one. There are more songs to come.
Thanks for the review.
Great stuff =)
I've been checking back for a new song often, and I was starting to lose hope, but finally something new came out. It's pretty good, too =). Some of it seems a little repetitive, but I really don't mind at all. I love the intro, by the way. 5/5, 8/10, and a download =)
Yeah I was losing hope too haha. It took me forever to finish this.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Thanks for listening and the review.
Although not something I'd normally listen to...
This song still sounds great, and I can imagine using it in some animations, especially more serious ones, maybe when a character is sad or confused. Or at the beginning of a serious animation. I dunno, but keep up the good work! =)
Oh my god this is amazing!
This painting is amazingly done. I don't know too much about painting, but I've tried it a little myself and this is amazingly better than 1/100th of anything I could ever even dream of achieving. It looks great, I'd love to see it in person xD. Keep up the amazing art! =)
Thank you very much. I'm glad you like it :)
This picture is great! I really like the colors you used, and I like that half-open golden fruit hidden among the apples (or whatever they may be. Maybe they're guavaberries!)
The half open fruit is a peach
And the red fruits are really big cherries.
Guavaberries are a bit more round
And thank you very much !
I think the most difficult part of this drawing
was to choose the correct colors
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